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24 TCS: The Written Comic

Hey all,

There won't be an illustrated strip today, because, well, the script for it got so big I was looking at either a three day comic or roughly six pages, which, as you know is just not feasible with my hectic work schedule. It's actually the first time my idea got too big to handle.

So, I present to you the printed version of the script instead.


The location: Heaven.

Bill Buchanan steps off a escalator, greeted by a tall skinny man.

Bill: Regional Management Director Walsh! Good to see you.
Bill shakes his hand
Richard: It's just Richard now Bill. Didn't expect you up here this early.
Bill: Well, I was working with Jack, so...
Richard: Bauer? Ha ha. I think anyone who ends up around him loses 8 out of 9 lives around him.

They begin to walk around the clouds. Various people are seen in the backdrop.
Edgar Stiles: I actually got to know Chloe as a person!
Milo Pressman: Well, I at least got the courage up and went out on a date with her!

Bill takes notice at a glance.
Bill: Lot of familiar faces around here.
Richard: Sometimes too many too soon I think.

As they continue to walk, another arguement is taking place.
Ryan Chappelle: No! We need to follow protocol and ensure that Tuesdays are meatloaf days!
George Mason: You really need to get your head out of your cloud and realize that we don't have to abide by bureacracy now!

they continue to walk more, as a few others in the backdrop is talking to a help desk manager.

Bill: Are you sure this is heaven?
Richard: Sometimes I wonder, I really do.

Charles Logan: Look, I just want to know I'm dead or not! Look it up in your databse. I have to be in there! L-O-G-A-N.
President Keller. Excuse me, but I was here first. (to manager) The name is Keller. (to Logan) What are you doing here anyways?

Two figures approach Bill and Richard.
Michelle Dessler-Almeida: Bill! So good to see you. She hugs him. Oh, silly me, you've never met-- Bill Buchanan, meet Teri Bauer.
Teri: Wonderful to meet you. Michelle speaks very highly of you. You kept Jack out of trouble quite a bit. I can't thank you enough for what you did.
Bill: I was just doing what it took to keep the country safe, and he's doing a good job if it.
Richard: Well, what say we all go get some coffee and tea, hm?
Teri: Good idea. Why don't we call David Palmer to see if he wants to join us?
Bill: I can't have cappuchino-- makes my system all jumpy.
everyone stops and looks at Bill quietly, then all have a good laugh. Bill looks puzzled.

The four walk away, Michelle putting her hand on Bill's shoulder.
Michelle: Oh Bill, you've got a lot to learn about what you can get away with up here now.

A woman with brown hair, looking weathered, is surrounded by red and flickers of fire. As she sits in a cubicle with stacks of paperwork, she looks at a calendar. Every day of the week is a Monday.

Final Frame: Back in heaven, as Richard, Bill, Teri and Michelle walk, a loud "NOOOOOOO!" erupts from underneath them.


Bill: What... or who was that?
Teri/Michelle/Richard (with smiles on their faces): Nina Myers.

Comments

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docsaico
Mar. 17th, 2009 03:15 am (UTC)
EPIC.

OMG, that was so awesome. I was particularly tickled by the "every day being Monday" thing and the Ryan/George argument. HILARIOUSNESS. <3
24thecomicstrip
Mar. 18th, 2009 10:31 pm (UTC)
Hah! Thanks very much!

I'd hate a calendar like that.
docsaico
Mar. 18th, 2009 10:33 pm (UTC)
Sounds like somebody's got a case of the Mondays. ;D
24thecomicstrip
Mar. 18th, 2009 10:42 pm (UTC)
"PC Load letter? What the ***k does that mean?!"
docsaico
Mar. 18th, 2009 10:49 pm (UTC)
XD <333
scotch3554
Mar. 17th, 2009 06:02 am (UTC)
awesome... jsut awesome. i would love to see that drawn out one day....
24thecomicstrip
Mar. 18th, 2009 10:30 pm (UTC)
Thanks!

But as I mentioned to Teknodave under this comment, I don't know if it's really worth drawing out during the summer once the show is over. It lacks punch after the show's done.
scotch3554
Mar. 19th, 2009 05:53 am (UTC)
we already got the punch... and it was good!
teknodave
Mar. 17th, 2009 06:31 am (UTC)
Man, this is gonna look awesome when you have the time to get it done. Heard things got interesting on Dancing again...joy!
24thecomicstrip
Mar. 18th, 2009 10:23 pm (UTC)
Welllllll, it'll have to wait until the show's over if I do. And even then, I don't know if it would have the same punch being as it's more "current event" now than down the road.
yaboiksar
Mar. 17th, 2009 01:04 pm (UTC)
LOL that was awesome.

I did wibble a little when I read Michelle's part.

I'm lame for admitting that I know.
24thecomicstrip
Mar. 18th, 2009 10:24 pm (UTC)
Wibble? Is that like a lip quiver? Because there's nothing lame about admitting that.

Thanks though!
yaboiksar
Mar. 18th, 2009 10:44 pm (UTC)
Yes a wibble is where you are about to cry but you are just holding it in. And I'm glad I didn't seem like a wanker for admitting it.

*sheepish*
jjthefourth
Mar. 18th, 2009 10:32 am (UTC)
That was AWESOME! I'm glad you posted the script, because I can imagine it in your signature style, and I totally enjoyed it!
24thecomicstrip
Mar. 18th, 2009 10:25 pm (UTC)
Thanks very much!

BTW, 24thecomicstrip.com is once again having problems. I think I'm gonna have to stick to the journal address to keep it working.
jjthefourth
Mar. 19th, 2009 03:54 am (UTC)
Honestly, I think your ISP is just fucking up like mine does, claiming it can't find a website. It happens to me with Google of all things, and you know Google's servers ain't shoddy.
24thecomicstrip
Mar. 19th, 2009 04:13 am (UTC)
Actually, it's just hanging. I've tried it from various computers, and it just looks indefinitely-- like it's still there, but not coming in at all. It's not even timing out.

I dunno.
jjthefourth
Mar. 19th, 2009 11:09 am (UTC)
It's never been an issue for me when I've used it, but things like this can be hard to catch. If you need to switch to just using the LJ address, that's cool. I'll still keep up the URL, if only for my own use. :D
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